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Post by Mitesh on Mar 2, 2005 18:30:19 GMT 6
Man ko bhari bisaune chautari khojda khojdai Jivan rupi deurali ma rumalliyen ma. Bhawana mera bhujhidine saathi khojda khojdai Manisa ko vid ma almaliyen ma.
And it continues
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Post by Finlip on Mar 2, 2005 19:26:06 GMT 6
Man ko bhari bisaune chautari khojda khojdai Jivan rupi deurali ma rumalliyen ma. Bhawana mera bhujhidine saathi khojda khojdai Manisa ko vid ma almaliyen ma. And it continues Continue.
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Post by Mitesh on Mar 2, 2005 19:37:53 GMT 6
Thaha chaina hindai chu kun gantabya ko khojima Sanchi ek anjuli aasa jindagi ko gojima Tehi aasa pani mero marna lagi sakyo ani jindagi yo khokriyera rittina lagi sakyo
Dodharilo afnai man sanga kusti khel da khel dai Aja pheri naramrari pachariyen ma pachariyen ma
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Post by Finlip on Mar 2, 2005 20:11:07 GMT 6
Thaha chaina hindai chu kun gantabya ko khojima Sanchi ek anjuli aasa jindagi ko gojima Tehi aasa pani mero marna lagi sakyo ani jindagi yo khokriyera rittina lagi sakyo Dodharilo afnai man sanga kusti khel da khel dai Aja pheri naramrari pachariyen ma pachariyen ma Is this all? Why don't you make it into a song?
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Post by Mitesh on Mar 3, 2005 10:05:41 GMT 6
Ya anupI have added music into it
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Post by blackpepper on Mar 19, 2005 1:41:46 GMT 6
Really nice work you have done here Mitesh. Nice poem, the words you have used are really something.
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Post by Mitesh on Mar 21, 2005 12:18:06 GMT 6
thank u tara.but the most satisfying poem that i have written goes like this
"Sim sim jhareko pani Bhijeko ankha ko nani
Ansu ho ki pani ho thahai bhayena"
and it continues
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Post by ashleen on May 9, 2005 18:59:37 GMT 6
dammi chha yarr
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Post by Dead luv' on Jul 13, 2005 11:53:52 GMT 6
GOOD POEM YAAR. I ALSO WRITE SONGS. I HAVE WRITTEN AND ALSO COMPOSED ABOUT 15 SONGS TILL NOW. I AM ROMAN RANA. WHY DON'T WE BOTH BE FRIENDS. HOPE YOU WILL ACCEPT MY PURPOSAL. THANKS IF YOU DO SO. MY ADD IS DOL_SAM@HOTMAIL OR DOL_SAM7@YAHOO.COM. IF YOU LIKE ME AS A FRIEND TO COMPOSE SONGS THAN I WILL FEEL NICE. I AM ON THE WAY TO COMPOSE ONE ENGLISH SONG BUT I AM NOT ABLE SO I AM IN SEARCH OF PERSONF WHO CAN HELP ME IN THAT.[glow=red,2,300][/glow]BYE .
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Post by jokaju on Aug 16, 2005 22:47:13 GMT 6
really nice !!! ani where's the remaining of the second poem?
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Post by ashleen on Oct 25, 2005 22:19:59 GMT 6
lol daami chha keep it up
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Post by abja on Oct 31, 2005 15:28:52 GMT 6
WAS IT REALLY YOUR POEM? IT SEEMS LIKE A SONG. AS YOU HAVE TOLD THAT YOU HAVE COMPOSED MUSIC FOR IT. NOW FIND A BETTER SINGER FOR YOUR THIS CREATION WHO WILL BE ABLE TO DO FULL JUSTICE TO IT.
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Post by Finlip on Oct 31, 2005 19:08:20 GMT 6
Mitesh is a very good singer himself.
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Post by Mitesh on Nov 20, 2005 12:37:24 GMT 6
This is my another poem
Simsim jhareko pani Bhijeko Ankhan ko nani Ansu ho ki Pani ho ki Thahai bhayena
Vakanno hridaya bhitra chimlinyen auta netra Dubai ankha rasayeko Pattai bhayena
Lakh kosis garen ansu sanchna Timilai birsera bachna Afai lai birseko Yadai bhayena
(I would justify the meaning of each stanza in next post,plz do send me the comments)
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Post by Finlip on Nov 20, 2005 12:44:50 GMT 6
Looking forward to your next post.
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Post by Mitesh on Dec 3, 2005 22:36:20 GMT 6
The first verse A guy in tragedy has been walking during rain.He has been crying.His tears is in direct contact with the rain and it becomes dificult for him to separate whether it is water or the tears that wets his eyes
The second verse This guy tries to save his tears by closing one of his eyes (Chimliyen auta netra).But as we all know it is impossible for a normal person with two eyes to cry only with one eyes ,both of his eyes get wet.(dubai ankha rasayeko pattai bhayena)
The third verse The tragedy guy tries to forget his love but in this attempt he forgets himself
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Post by Finlip on Dec 4, 2005 12:02:15 GMT 6
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Post by Abe on Dec 21, 2005 18:46:42 GMT 6
great songs mitesh and u i am too a composer and my songs are in my diary u can read it.
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